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Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

0 posted 2009-06-12 03:54 PM


Bones was born
and raised up
in the hood.

He’s a son
after our own hearts.  

He fits right in
with our culture here.  

The hood of course
is known for its
criminal element,
and general poverty.  

We’re noted for our burglars.  

Books* have been written about us,
and our unique culture
has been studied by many writers,
and social scientists.  

No one in the hood needs
to lock there doors at night,
it’s just not necessary.  

There’s a certain code of honor,
and all the burglars know
that we don’t have enough valuable stuff
to bother troubling themselves about.  

It’s a good, safe, friendly place
to live, and raise a family.

* http://www.amazon.com/Confessions-Second-Story-Man-Kripplebauer/dp/1569803137

Bobby

[This message has been edited by Robert E. Jordan (06-12-2009 04:36 PM).]

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brneyedgrly
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since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere
1 posted 2009-06-13 11:23 AM


~yo bobby...i'm glad bones feels safe in the hood
Marc-Andre
Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501

2 posted 2009-06-13 11:26 AM


Bobby, this one doesn't work as well for me, I much prefer your usual minimalist style, which makes for a more vivid impression. This one is alright, but perhaps too much "telling." That out of the way, I've enjoyed reading it nonetheless.

Mark

Robert E. Jordan
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3 posted 2009-06-13 11:39 AM


Thanks dear Brneyedgrly,

Yes, the hood is safe for a kid like Bones.  None of Bones clients are from the hood.  Word would get out, and they would have to move.

Love Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
4 posted 2009-06-13 11:41 AM


Thanks Mark,

I'm pleased that you enjoyed the read "nonetheless".

Bobby

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