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LAST WORDS TO ME IN A TELEPHONE CALL
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LAST WORDS TO ME IN A TELEPHONE CALL |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere 
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The words you spoke today, to me Knocked me to my knees As I hung on every word, I found it difficult to breathe: “If I didn’t have these Things I have to do, Right this minute I’d fall, melt into your arms. I’d come straight to you.” That was when my hope died And my spirit sunk and I tried not to cry… I tried… My voice barely a whisper, Chest heaving with silent sobs, I was utterly devastated By the weight of your words. All I could do was plead: “What am I supposed To do with that? How can you say Those words to me?” So it all came down to The difference in our beliefs, And the fact that I am rooted And you…you are free. The words you spoke today, to me Shattered matters of my heart, Cast shadows on my shine, Made my dreams go dark. It was then I knew for fact That you…you’re not coming back For me… ~ from “Songs from the Time of Kren Shaw” ~I am the keeper of what he cast off~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
brneyedgrly - while reading your words I was within them. Great write... BC |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
thank you for feeling me, bill...much appreciated on another note...i did not intend to shout my title. i copied and pasted into the tab without realizing it WAS IN ALL CAPS! which is quite funny...i'm not an all caps kind of girl lol |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Brneyedgrly, That sounds too bad. I'm sure you will get over it in time. Love bobby |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~well, bobby, welcome...been waitin for you to pay me a visit! checked you out online and am in awe...would love to chat sometime ~I am the keeper of what he cast off~ |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dear Brneyedgrly, I take it that you are a young person with severe problems of the heart. You probably think that your world has come to an end. Well I have some good news for you, although it may take a while but the sun will shine again without fail, and you will meet someone new who will light your fire and make you forget your broken heart. Good luck my friend. Lindsay |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
thanks for the kind words, Linds... the story of kren shaw is this: it was beautiful, complicated, heart~breaking, life changing, magical and tragic... i am not that young; i've had other loves to compare it to. i've loved this man for the last ten years, but for a while now i've been quite over it and can't wait to fall in love again... ~I am the keeper of what he cast off~ |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india |
Poignant and the touch of sadness makes it immortal. |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~thanks for your kind words, pod |
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Penwing Member
since 2009-07-27
Posts 73Waverly, MN |
Wonderful write. it was awesome. I also wanted to thank you for the warm welcome you gave me into PIP May the stars guide you, Penwing |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Shellie, this sounds so sad. I feel your pain. If you ever need or want to talk, you know how to get in touch with me. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Your poetry uplifts me even when it is sad. Good job. Have I told you how happy I am that you are here at PiP? I am. A |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dear Shellie, you wrote that so very well, Although a little sad it came from the heart. Always remember tho', things are never as bad as they seem, and I'm sure the sun will shine again for you and I wish you luck. Love Lindsay |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Felt this one, Shellie. Ida |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
wow...thanks little winged one you pulled this out of the back forty  thanks everyone for your replies! love, shel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Who needs that?!? Not our Brown-eyed Beauty! Gosh, you wrote so convincingly and realistically that I felt as though I was eaves-dropping! Loveya ss, Linda  |
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Windhover Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 179UK |
Beautiful, wistful poem, Milady... I know that feeling exactly... but, if you feel the need for an antidote, try the first scribble I ever put on PiP... /main/forumdisplay.cgi?action=displayarchive&number=100&topic=001083 D. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
shellie - no, you're not a CAPS kinda girl, you're too tender to be so... BC |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
lovely linda (ss) that's what I was tryin' to do windhover thank you...and thanks for the link to your first post...it was beautifully written and I found your words very comforting thanks bc ~wink~ love, shel |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
I love to read you. The way you, phrase, pause, let me think on the words, and keep pulling me deeper into your thoughts. So well done, Very much enjoyed. Love, Tracey. The answer is always NO, Until the question is asked. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...reminds me of a letter I read from my ex-wife's Argentina lover...James |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
thanks so much tracey...that means a lot ________________________________ thanks for your comment james my mind won't rest and I don't sleep... |
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