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Chalmette Guy
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0 posted 2009-06-11 03:40 PM


I will drink of the most bitter poison
Taste its strength upon my dry and cracked lips
Knowing my mind has lost sense of reason
Still, I would keep taking the damning sips

I would place the blade of the sharpened knife
Upon my breast, the point cold in its cut,
Feel it drain the blood from this useless life
As sight grows dim, these eyes begin to shut

I could drown in depths of oceans endless
To sink in its dark and watery grave
Of falling to sleep in dreams bottomless,
Yet another with crushed hopes to be saved

I would do these things rather willingly
Than suffer ever, you apart from me


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1 posted 2009-06-11 03:46 PM


understand how this one feels nice work Jerry
2islander2
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2 posted 2009-06-11 04:03 PM


Hi Guy, this is quite upsetting and the suffering let a print in the eye, thank you for the touching poem that possess its strong sentimental truth.

regards

yann

viking_metal
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3 posted 2009-06-11 04:28 PM


That "shoot" runs deep.

we could all pray to be so lucky.

nice write man. you are kicking out good ones every day.


-P

Everyone deserves to be loved, even you.

brneyedgrly
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4 posted 2009-06-11 05:50 PM


I could drown in depths of oceans endless
To sink in its dark and watery grave
Of falling to sleep in dreams bottomless,
Yet another with crushed hopes to be saved

I would do these things rather willingly
Than suffer ever, you apart from me


~oh, the things we would do for love...physical pain, death...both easier to take than heartbreak

~I am the keeper of what he cast off~

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5 posted 2009-10-06 11:37 AM


Once we've known love's touch, no sacrifice is too much to keep it near. *S*

Absolutely gorgeous write!!

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6 posted 2009-10-06 11:45 AM


These are e-motions of the heart that cause high waves upon the ocean of love.

Most beautiful!

Love,
Margherita

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