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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2009-06-11 08:11 AM


perhaps a sailor's dawn it is on eye
this siren song seduction seeping under
cellophane iron I closed and locked in mind

then pressed the story scars of a warrior there
the seal of a statue with tattoos from back to brim

my hands grow damp in the liquid glove persuasion
tearing at the tarrying grimaced sun
that pries tomorrow open just a mouth width

then spits his warm to spatter an acid thaw
across a frozen heart I carved from diamond

oh the gauzy breath of freedom's gavel
dare I curse her dancing with solid word
or would my wisdom be better spent in mutter

lest she feel the verve of my nerve in whet
and bid me welcome to her willing well of womb

to bequeath the severing of my contentment's pride


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daark (owgish) highway series



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steavenr
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1 posted 2009-06-11 09:34 AM


"oh the gauzy breath of freedom's gavel
dare I curse her dancing with solid word
or would my wisdom be better spent in mutter"

I love the writer's reflections that you unveil in this stanza...I just wish that I could say that I understood it all...easily, but that would be a lie (or an untruth at best).  This write is like a sea...waiting to be sailed, explored, and re-visited again & again...so, I'll be gathering jewels from this one for some time to come...exquisite write

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2009-06-11 09:57 AM


steavenr..thanks amigo..it is just the quandary of the highway vs the mundane confinement of familiar...the metal of my steed, the leather of my skin, the gypsy of my soul all compete with the methodic twiddling of my occasionally proper thumbs for my heart's attention..any of the highway series pieces will be gravel based and sunset highlighted.
brneyedgrly
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since 2009-06-08
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3 posted 2009-06-11 06:10 PM


dark...the above reply was as beautiful as your poem...

: )

~I am the keeper of what he cast off~

Hatmadda
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4 posted 2009-06-12 02:08 AM


I can appreciate the quandary of steavenr. In fact, I've been reading and rereading some of your work, and going over it. The more I look though, the more I realize that some things are better left unknown and instead left to surrealism and appreciation of sentimental creation. I have my own Rorschach ideas that no doubt differ from the actual. Mighty fine imagery though. The nuked-er the better (heh). Cheers.
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5 posted 2009-06-12 03:02 AM


D

Some poems are gateways to the colorful images of dreams. I am taking this one to bed with me and let it lead me to night pictures of riding, feeling, seeing and being there.

G'nite, my friend.

A

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2009-06-12 07:39 AM


browneyes..thanks lady!~!

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hat'  thanks for the read and comment...

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ali-san, thanks lady!!

BluesSerenade
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7 posted 2009-06-12 08:37 PM


Love the special effects of gravel and sunset, when it's done right, of course.

I always dug OWG's persona.  It's all about the ride!!!

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2009-06-13 06:56 AM


ms bluezy...can see you in leather..on metal..smiling, thanks lady
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