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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2009-06-10 07:44 AM


* * *

I knew about the ruse and I

waited to be told the truth

(wittingly--unwittingly)

my silence stole the spot from stage

and blinded me stage-center.

So I stood up as not to ruin

the curtain call of us--

and tossed my roses on the stage

waiting for the extra act

reconciliation

even while I stood outside

waiting for acknowledgment

"Sign my program, would you please?"

Then I thought that they would see

I played apart--

it says so here:

Clair: the audient (my name)

but my moment never came

as I stood outside the cast

watching them blow kisses then

they went on

to their party

to wait for the reviews.

* * * * *

"Scathing brilliance!"

(New York Times)

"Five-star entertainment plus"

I wept as they rejoiced.

"...superb casting overcame

the labored writing of cliche'"

Impromptu had saved the day

on the night I lost my voice...

* * * * *

Home, again, it's 3:16,

I'm out of coffee, so I make

some tea and add vanilla too,

to sooth the bitter sweet.

* * * * *

All that it takes to lose one's way

is to stare at blinking lights

so long that they imprint the eyes

blazing louder than old Sol...

(sometimes that keeps me up all night)

It's why advisors preach and scold--

"Write from what you know." They chant,

as I confessed:

"I do not know"

the ruse became reality

as proven quite collectively

by thunderous applause.

* * *


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steavenr
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1 posted 2009-06-10 09:25 AM


lovely metaphor...indeed, 'all the world's a stage'...it's just the cost of admission sometimes that's overbearing...
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2 posted 2009-06-10 09:54 AM


All that it takes to lose one's way

is to stare at blinking lights

so long that they imprint the eyes

I'm coming over there so I can follow you and find where you buy those magical pens... Maybe if I buy enough, I can write just one sentence that's half as good as your every word. *S*

Brilliant!!

latearrival
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3 posted 2009-06-10 03:47 PM


What writing! You have IT and it gets better all the time if that is possble.
serenity blaze
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4 posted 2009-06-10 04:04 PM


steaven? I thank you, so much, because from your reply I'm stealing a new title.

Ruth? Ikyk...sigh, love ya totally

and just a wink and a hug for marty jo (she kinda had a backstage pass)

Thanks for reading. Love to you all.

Kaoru
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5 posted 2009-06-10 04:48 PM


Always much enjoyed.
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6 posted 2009-06-10 04:53 PM


I'm bowing as low as I can go without falling over. GRIN....you are the best!

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2009-06-10 04:58 PM


Stop with that, you! (Kacy, you know I'm talking to you!)

If I tried to do that I'd end up in traction.

and megs? I'd wish you warm hugs and love, but I'm hot, so I'll wish you cool breezes and a few of those little umbrella drink concoctions, delivered to you by a hot guy in a loin cloth. (oh...sorry, I do get carried away.)

And while I'm still here, thanks to howardstu--this one has been roiling in me, and it was through reading his (her?) their stuff that I was able to find a format I liked.

And now--it's nearing primetime!

oy

Love to all.

iliana
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8 posted 2009-06-12 07:47 AM


And here is a little more applause........    loves you.....jo
Gentle Spirit
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9 posted 2009-06-12 08:57 AM


hon, your talent shines so brightly

and yer pretty darn brilliant too

I love what you do.  

serenity blaze
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10 posted 2009-06-12 07:52 PM


You guys are definitely the best.

Inspiring and supportive, and always a comfort.

I'm not worthy.

Alison
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11 posted 2009-06-13 11:42 PM


Okay, I am offically speechless (again) by your writing.  Your images are so strong and you use words in a way that makes a poem stand apart as yours.  I like this a lot.  Again, I like your poetry a lot.

Alison

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