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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2009-06-09 06:39 PM



My heart thumps
drumming in my chest
loudly, deafening
crushing all rhyme and reason
nothing makes sense

this airs so dense
I can not capture my breath

so hard, it is to breathe
   it sickens me

til arms are flailing
in mid-air

sinking deeper
then suddenly it is there

soothing, calming
quieting fears

I hold it dear

it is not to be
yet it is

because it was
gifted to me

perhaps it was
or was not meant to be

  but it remains

       cherished.

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Bloodline
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since 2009-05-23
Posts 236
Oklahoma
1 posted 2009-06-09 08:02 PM


A most prized possesion, something
we cherish, enjoyed,

Bloodline

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
2 posted 2009-06-09 08:04 PM


I can feel the flutters, the breath and breathlessness of the scene taking place
BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2009-06-10 12:05 PM


Hey Donna~  I am liking this expressive, emotional poem of yours.
It's that love/hate thingy and I love how you got that all across.
  
It is sooooo good to read you again.
Hugs, gal~

steavenr
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4 posted 2009-06-10 01:03 AM


"perhaps it was
or was not meant to be

  but it remains

       cherished."

I love the personal outlook on life these lines portray...like a window into one's soul...speaking to the philosophy of living...

Heart2Heart
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since 2009-05-15
Posts 738
Scotland/Norway
5 posted 2009-06-10 06:04 AM


Loved the sentiments in this one, so well penned.  
Heart2Heart

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6 posted 2009-06-10 09:24 AM


perhaps it was
or was not meant to be

  but it remains

       cherished.

This resonates within me, reminding me of my touchstones that sustain... my blessings whatever the circumstance. *S* Beautiful write!!!

Alison
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7 posted 2009-06-13 11:03 PM


I thought I had responded to this poem before tonight.  I almost felt you take the deep breaths to calm yourself as you found your life line.  Well, maybe not "you" - but in the poem.  Make sense?  I like this poem, GS ~ and I am glad you are back and sharing the talent of 'you'.

xoxoxo
Alison

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