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Sonofgloin Junior Member
since 2009-06-09
Posts 48Australia |
The sun did at last flicker it's erstwhile dance, while we huddled cold and hungry but gifted by chance. Twenty two of us sat in the stench and decay, that humanity created on that penultimate day. From nations with tongues strange to my ears, my twenty one bretherin mirrored my fears. We sat and we watched and we wondered aloud, but no answers nor murmers came from our crowd. How from our billions we handful had come, to be the very last, it is us save none. We peered into the darkness of the humanless night, electricity like commerce a historical site. Why only we were gathered we could not digest, and we asked each other why in tongues strange to the rest. All my family and friends a memory now, it is to these 21 strangers my life must avow. Our eyes raised to the heavens when a shape pierced the night, the visitors have returned, their craft bathed in light. Then an alien being from the craft did declare, in a tongue that was foreign but abundantly clear. You have been chosen the experiments run, you eleven pair humans reared under this sun. We planted the seed but, had forgone the staff. so now we are back to sort wheat from chalf. In a single voice we cried aloud "why us". Because we exhibit our product of worlds turned to dust. What name shall we call you, we asked trembling and grieved. Well you chose Jehovah, for my ancestor Steve. Sonofgloin. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
interesting story...btw, welcome...found this line visually viable: "electricity like commerce a historical site" ...it works well to get your point across...again, thank you for sharing & welcome to PiP |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
Very interesting write, I read and re-read it trying to get the whole jest of it. Still trying to figure out who Steve is? Well writen, though. Enjoyed, Tracey. PS. Welcome to the Blue Addiction. PIP |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! Please check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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Sonofgloin Junior Member
since 2009-06-09
Posts 48Australia |
WTBAKELAR, AND OTHERS, THANKS FOR THE REPLY'S....Re who is "Steve", the theme is based around the return to earth of the aliens who propogated mankind, and our ancestors thought they were divine, thus calling them god and the old testiment name of Jehovah. Whereas the aliens are like us mortal, hence the reference of "you called my ancestor Jehovah, but his name was Steve, just another mortal life form without divinity. |
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freeze us both in time@ Junior Member
since 2009-06-14
Posts 16 |
Just read this youve done it again sonofgloin!!! ABFAB MATE! peaceNlove ~freeze~ |
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Sonofgloin Junior Member
since 2009-06-09
Posts 48Australia |
Thanks for that, do you like Aussie bush poetry?....Paul. |
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