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DK
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0 posted 2016-06-20 03:06 PM


You are like a needle
Piercing my heart
Just like a knife
It rips apart
My mind tells me
That this is enough
It's not worth
Being this tough
My heart is saying
Please stay
But I sit in misery
Every day
Sliding into
A pit of despair
Trying to block it out
Without seeming to care
I pretend to be fine
With my shattered heart
In its place
Debris that been blown apart
Left with nothing
But an empty space
I live with a blank stare
On my face
My emotions
Cast aside
Like a boat
Lost in the tide
The suns rays
Shining brightly
On this frozen heart
That's guarded tightly


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South Side Of Success
1 posted 2016-07-10 08:13 PM


Your poem has the appearance of a candlestick, reminding me that a lighted candle is a better source of warmth than the sun for an aching heart.

One ladle serves the soup that feeds the mouths of the many.

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