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Octave
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0 posted 05-16-2012 05:21 PM       View Profile for Octave   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Octave


Nothing like a bit of break-up poetry. I haven't been writing much lately so excuse the rustiness. Crit welcome, as always.


Shadows

Youíre a shadow now
Always drifting behind
Even when the sun lights up the back of my head
And illuminates my mind

The bitterness has eased
And the tears have melted too
Itís the warmth and talk and smiles
That I want back from you

I spent so much time and energy
Curled up in my own sorry self-pity
Of a broken down, beaten up relationship
That was never really pretty

But one night of reunion
In friendship and in trust
Has made me come to realise
Itís got naught to do with lust

But Iíve trampled every part
Of what could have been okay
By thriving on my anger
And the flaws in every day

But itíll be alright, I know now
Because itís taught me more, I see
Iíve learnt from my mistakes
I know you gave a lot to me

Youíre a shadow now
Always drifting behind
Itís a comfort, itís a lesson
It reminds me you were mine.
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priyanka
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since 06-15-2009
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1 posted 06-08-2012 03:40 AM       View Profile for priyanka   Email priyanka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for priyanka

its just so beautiful...
i especially liked this-

"The bitterness has eased
And the tears have melted too
Itís the warmth and talk and smiles
That I want back from you"

simple yet captures a heartfelt emotion. Just lovely

 
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