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madelyn
Member
since 2009-09-03
Posts 172
Purgatory

0 posted 2011-11-06 06:58 PM


It's like each thing that stresses you out
is a brick
tied to your body
tying your body down
and you are trying to swim
but all you do is sink
and with each new level of depth
you realise that you are
running out of breath
which adds another brick
to your body
sinking further
you don't realise it at the time
but you won't get out of this
alive
and by the time you do realise
it's just another brick
weighing you down

My pen is the barrel of a gun. Remind me which side you should be on.

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jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
1 posted 2012-04-12 11:15 PM


Having read several of your pieces you have very good "flow" in your writing, my friend, which makes for smooth, easy reading.

enjoyed the read.

j.

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