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what do you see?
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
look into my eyes and tell me what you see do you see the sadness or the happiness well if you picked happiness then you are wrong its the sadness in my eyes my eyes filled up with tears burning up and turning crimson red now feel my hear is my heart crying in pain and agony or the beating of my heart getting faster and faster well if you picked my heart beat getting faster and fastr then you are wrong because its actually both because of the way i feel while I'm in pain and agony my heart is starting to beat faster and faster no matter how difficult it is to control can't you just see the way I feel now finally go into my mind and tell me what you see do you see my dreams or an image of someone well if you picked my dreams then you are wrong its actually my dreams and an image of someone because i have my own dreams with that imaginary person that i don't know of me being happy with that person but when you look deeper and deeper all of it is shattered like pointy pieces of glass now finally did you see the real me? did you already find the real me? did you think I'm always happy? tell me what you think of the way i feel with this heart and this mind since everything is so complicated to understand look into my eyes feel my heartbeat getting faster and faster now go inside my mind and tell me what you see maddorani |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
I like the way this provokes and challenges the reader to actually attempt to "Look", at least in the mind. It's important that we are seen, and that we see each other. I enjoy the substance of this work. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
thank you  i would like to read some of your work too i read some of your work but i look forward to reading more |
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