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maddorani
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since 11-18-2007
Posts 419
houston,tx


0 posted 03-25-2011 03:54 PM       View Profile for maddorani   Email maddorani   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for maddorani

look into my eyes
and tell me
what you see
do you see
the sadness
or the happiness
well if you
picked happiness
then you are
wrong
its the sadness
in my eyes
my eyes
filled up
with tears
burning up
and turning
crimson red
now feel my hear
is my heart
crying in
pain and agony
or the beating
of my heart getting
faster and faster
well if you picked
my heart beat
getting faster and fastr
then you are wrong
because its actually
both
because of the way
i feel
while I'm in
pain and agony
my heart is starting
to beat faster
and faster
no matter how
difficult it is to
control
can't you just
see the way I
feel
now finally go
into my mind
and tell me
what you see
do you see
my dreams
or an image
of someone
well if you picked
my dreams
then you are wrong
its actually
my dreams
and an image
of someone
because i have
my own dreams
with that imaginary
person
that i don't know
of
me being
happy with
that
person
but
when
you
look
deeper and deeper
all of it is
shattered
like pointy
pieces of
glass
now finally
did you  see
the real me?
did you already
find the real me?
did you think
I'm always
happy?
tell me
what you
think of the
way i feel
with this heart
and this mind
since everything
is so complicated to
understand
look into my eyes
feel my heartbeat
getting faster
and faster
now go inside
my mind
and tell me
what you see

maddorani

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XGarapanX
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since 06-19-2008
Posts 1416
Rekjavik Iceland


1 posted 03-27-2011 10:55 PM       View Profile for XGarapanX   Email XGarapanX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit XGarapanX's Home Page   View IP for XGarapanX

I like the way this provokes and challenges the reader to actually attempt to "Look", at least in the mind. It's important that we are seen, and that we see each other. I enjoy the substance of this work.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

maddorani
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since 11-18-2007
Posts 419
houston,tx


2 posted 03-28-2011 01:27 AM       View Profile for maddorani   Email maddorani   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for maddorani

thank you i would like to read some of your work too i read some of your work but i look forward to reading more
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