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Days to Come

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Joshkt
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since 02-09-2011
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0 posted 03-05-2011 11:02 AM       View Profile for Joshkt   Email Joshkt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Joshkt

Thinkin Bout the days to come
and what you got left in your soul
tell yourself its different
everyones exuberant
except for you and me my love
We wont always see the same
Everything is different
I wish I never sent that note
That sailed away on a paper boat
then sunk to the bottom of your heart
We never really got to smart
but thinking bout the days to come
see what we made different
who knows what they really meant
on that secret mission to our brain
I think we're all insane
cause we never feel that much pain
like the birds and the bees in the trees
We get so we weak in our knees
and never begging for you please
Cause I dont care if your back again
climbing out on a different limb
Swinging into the daylight
who cares what they really think
we live our lives in a single blink
Closing in on the brink
Hopefully our hearts wont sink
Maybe you just need a drink
to get your mind off this world
I dont know if your bored
or if you just nee
some love a hug, a kiss, a snugg, a tug
We're all just tiny little bugs
crawling all over the place
Trying to reach home base
Everything we've ever done
will not matter in the days to come
When we go for that drum
People may think were really dumb
we live our lives like silly kids
trying just to keep it real
Our worlds like a banana peel
coming off one bit at time
chaos all around us
but we dont really have the time
to look around us and whine
we just want to live our lives
without a care in the world
Dancing all over the floor
I dont know where is the door
were not done here just yet
we have a new adventure to start
I hope our lives dont part
Like a rail road track switch
look at that silly witch
making up fake tales
Lifes just like the mail
dont whats gonna find us
if were gonna take the next bus
move on to something else
cause we just cant stand ourselves
man I cant wait for the days to come
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madelyn
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since 09-03-2009
Posts 172
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1 posted 03-07-2011 05:19 AM       View Profile for madelyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for madelyn

I really enjoyed reading this poem.
Constructive Crit: If you break up your poem into stanza's it might make it easier/more inviting to read.

But, on the whole, it was an excellent poem.

M

"If I am an angel paint me with black wings"-Anne Rice

HolsJoscelyne
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since 04-05-2011
Posts 23
Colchester, United Kingdom


2 posted 04-06-2011 01:34 PM       View Profile for HolsJoscelyne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HolsJoscelyne

Brilliant and yes I'd echo what 'M' before me said!

But wow I loved it x

Holly Joscelyne poetry at dougthedreadpoetry.blogspot.com

 
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