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rebelangelv
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since 05-28-2007
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usa


0 posted 02-06-2011 01:12 AM       View Profile for rebelangelv   Email rebelangelv   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for rebelangelv

so I'm planning on giving this to my boyfriend for Valentine's day..cheesy I know. But i'm coming out of writer's block so i had to spin off of my old work a bit. any critique you have would be great because I want it to be perfect.

Let me tell you a story
A story that's actually true
Yes, it's a love story
And it's about me and you!

"Red Rover Red Rover"
Was how I met you
I was the losing underdog
Who you came to rescue

"Quieres ser mi paraja?"
I asked in our Spanish class
Our mutual love for the Bible
Made our friendship grow fast

Soon you had my heart
But you didn't want mine
I decided you were worth the wait
So I waited on the sidelines

I chased you for a year!
And yes, Disneyland was a scheme
But you never objected to my moves
Made me think that you wanted me

In July you married me
A drunk night to Sin City
But it was just a joke
You still didn't like me

*sigh* I was giving up hope
But my best friend yelled at you
Got you to open your eyes
Then you finally made a move  

A midnight evening in August
Our first kiss was shared
It was all so magical
There was such bliss in the air!

You actually said you loved me!
It's more than just a crush
I better be careful
Cause I'm falling for you so much!

And now, my love, it's Valentine's
My feelings I must confess
I like you just the way you are
Nothing more, nothing less

I love you way you treat me
So gentle and so kind
I thank God everyday
That He gave me a love like mine

We may not be the perfect couple
We definitely have our flaws
But we also work things out
With such effort that deserves applause

My long awaited fairytale
The thing I've dreamt of all my life
I've finally found in you, my dear
And it just feels so right

There's no need to be sad
With you by my side
The thought of you make me happy
And I think about you day and night

You cant understand how lucky I feel
To have someone like you
I'm feeling bliss for the first time
And I don't know what to do!

So on this day of love
There's one thing I want to do
I gotta tell you this secret:
Shhhhh! I love you!!! <3


only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget
© Copyright 2011 leah nelson - All Rights Reserved
SarahJoyScott
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since 01-13-2011
Posts 16
Finland


1 posted 02-07-2011 01:01 PM       View Profile for SarahJoyScott   Email SarahJoyScott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SarahJoyScott

Awww. That's a lovely poem!
It sounds cute N adorable!
Very nice poem!
Joshkt
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since 02-09-2011
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2 posted 02-09-2011 09:04 AM       View Profile for Joshkt   Email Joshkt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Joshkt

I love it so cute!!
HopelessRomantic101
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since 02-09-2011
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Georgia, United States of Amer


3 posted 02-09-2011 07:01 PM       View Profile for HopelessRomantic101   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HopelessRomantic101's Home Page   View IP for HopelessRomantic101

It's so cute.     I <3 it.  I was actually going to post a similar poem of mine when this caught my eye.
khadidja
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4 posted 02-19-2011 04:04 PM       View Profile for khadidja   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for khadidja

a very remantic cute poem

I just LOve it

plz tell me what does he said when u gave it to him?

it must be remantic^^

Lucky you
maddorani
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since 11-18-2007
Posts 419
houston,tx


5 posted 03-12-2011 06:54 PM       View Profile for maddorani   Email maddorani   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for maddorani

awwww i liked ur lucky
rebelangelv
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usa


6 posted 03-13-2011 03:08 PM       View Profile for rebelangelv   Email rebelangelv   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rebelangelv

thanks guys <3 he teared up a bit haha and then kissed me and said it was adorable

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

frencesmae
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since 01-07-2011
Posts 9
philippines


7 posted 03-29-2011 05:12 AM       View Profile for frencesmae   Email frencesmae   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for frencesmae

wow. i like it ^^
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