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Teen Poetry #9

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~XxMz.NerdyRockstarxX~
Junior Member

since 2011-01-14

Posts 15
Alabama, United States

0 posted 2011-01-20 04:09 AM

Im sorry I lied to you
And made you feel like you weren’t perfect
Im sorry I ignored you
And choose my friends to be wit
Im sorry Iforgot you
And all the wonderful things you did
Im sorry I hurt you
I promised I wouldn’t pretend

Like I didn’t love you
And everything you are
I told you so all the time
But only in the dark
When we laid side by side
Into to dreamland we’ll go
I dream of you every night
When I woke I told you so

Im sorry for everything stupid
That Ive ever done
And im really sorry
That you weren’t the only one

I keep apologizing
And saying sorry to you
But im done apologizing
For the things I didn’t do

~XxExpect Nothing N You'll Never Get HurtxX~

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

1 posted 2011-01-21 10:48 AM

Love it. Love the rhythm, flow, the thoughts behind it and how it stays on track down to the finish. Again, a few spelling issues which, to me, tends to distract the reader from the pure enjoyment of the piece, but over all I think this is awesome.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

maddorani
Member

since 2007-11-18

Posts 423
houston,tx

2 posted 2011-03-11 05:59 PM

i love it how it goes i felt the emotions

Haf_Alive
Member

since 2011-09-04

Posts 56
High in the Sky

3 posted 2011-09-05 02:09 PM

really good job transferring your emotions to words here. makes it easy to empathize. thanks

HAF

priyanka
Member

since 2009-06-15

Posts 216
india

4 posted 2011-10-03 09:10 PM

But im done apologizing
For the things I didn’t do
loved this! The best!

karren29
Member

since 2011-09-29

Posts 85
philippines

5 posted 2011-10-04 07:29 PM

this is a lovely poem, i felt ur emotions.. i enjoyed it very much

" u were never good enough for him or anything like me,
so u might as well sit back coz i aint trying to show maturity!!!!"

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