This is beautiful in its raw honesty, passable in its poetry, a little halting in its flow but nothing that can't be worked out. The only thing that needs major work is the spelling. Presentation is a large part of quality writing, and consistently poor spelling in a poem detracts from it's real beauty. It interrupts the readers enjoyment of the substance. But otherwise this is good.
·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"