Oh my gumbo. This is truly a very sincere poem full of meaning and I love it for what it is. My personal opinion is always that correct punctuation and spelling can only increase a poems worth, and there are some issues with that. And maybe someone else might have chosen some different wording in some places, and perhaps taken a careful eye to avoid repetitive words as well (barring intentional repetition for effect). But all in all it's really right on track in my view, as far as plainly spoken and stirring sentiments in poetry are concerned. I enjoyed this. Thank you for revealing your heart to us.
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