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Chavo.wavo
Junior Member
since 2010-11-13
Posts 15


0 posted 2010-11-26 01:18 PM



My love...
if only you knew what it meant...
My love burns in my heart with a fire so hot,
only your love will quench it.
My love explodes out of me like a bomb...
and flows right into you.
My love and your love will intertwine,
and create not two hearts, but one.
My love and your love will be a bond no one can break.
My love will soon become...
Our love...

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XGarapanX
Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
1 posted 2011-01-05 09:26 PM


This is romantic and full of wonderful sentiments, though I'm not sure it's the best you can do, after reading one or three of your others. I think you are capable of far better poetry than this, and I look forward to reading it as you produce it. Thanks!

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

Starcitta
Junior Member
since 2011-01-21
Posts 18
WY, USA
2 posted 2011-01-23 11:07 PM


I like it, its intense, which is good. I'd like to read more

Amor Y Lagrimas

FloraScars
Junior Member
since 2010-11-08
Posts 33
VA, USA
3 posted 2011-03-15 04:27 PM


nice and deep, you must love this person alot, but this poem leaves me wondering if they love you as much as you do them? this line for some reason i really liked:
     "My love and your love will intertwine,
      and create not two hearts, but one."

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