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Rosie_Orange
Junior Member
since 2009-04-20
Posts 46
South Africa

0 posted 2010-11-12 03:25 PM


Forty eight million sparkles.
The twinkle of lights
A galaxy of electricity
Switch on, switch off.
Create a ball of fire.
Let it shine, bring warmth
Burning up, a temperature
And all of a sudden
Darkness.
The flicker of black
The end,
The death.
Such a fragile piece of glass
A peculiar
Creation
Of utter hope and despair.

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XGarapanX
Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
1 posted 2011-01-05 08:35 PM


Oh my gumbo! No flattery intended. I save flattery for the dry-cleaner so he will refrain from putting holes in my shirt. This is so inexplicable, so incredible and so excellent that I have to applaud. This is as close to the essence of poetry (as I perceive it) as I have ever seen. Absolutely amazing piece. I think it appeals to my very prejudiced mind because this kind of thinking and perception follows my personal bent as well, when I ponder life. But I have never been able to put it so succinctly into poetry such as you have done here. You are my personal hero forever.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

XGarapanX
Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
2 posted 2011-01-05 09:43 PM


Ok. Added to Library. Need to figure out what that is...

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

*tori_rose*
Junior Member
since 2010-10-12
Posts 44
Weber City, VA
3 posted 2011-01-07 12:40 PM


this poem is amazing!!!

~*tori*~

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