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The Voice

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madelyn
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0 posted 10-17-2010 03:09 AM       View Profile for madelyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for madelyn

*Madelyn
She calls to me
Listens until she knows I’m listening
She tries again
*Madelyn
She calls to me
Answers to exams
Answers to thoughts
Answers to everything
Answers to everything but why…
Why me?
Who are you?
What are you?
How can I get rid of you?
She ignores me.
*Madelyn
She calls to me
Taunting me
Daring me
*Say I exsist
*Say it, say it
I can’t
I won’t
I don’t
If I do
She’ll take over
Me
My body
My mind
Even my soul
*Madelyn
She calls to me
It isn’t real
La,la, la
I can’t hear anything
La, la, la
Struggling
To conceal it
To conceal her
To conceal the confusion
*Madelyn
*Answer me honey,
*I’m here to help
*Protect
*And Defend you
*I am your guardian angel
*Answer me sweetie
*Madelyn
She calls to me
Lies
Or
The
Truth?
*Madelyn
She calls to me
She disrupts me
In class
At home
Everywhere
I can’t do it anymore
She keeps me up at night
With her constant chatter
Even when she tries to make me sleep
She fails
*Madelyn
She makes me feel…
Violated
*Madelyn
She calls to me
I toss and turn
Pray to an imagianary god
Who never answers
I cry in desperation
I want out
I want it to stop
I want it to go away
I want it to die
*Don’t cry darling,
*I love you
*I’ll help you
*You’re safe with me
With me?
With her?
When am I not with her?!
Every breath I take
She takes as well
Every move I make
She makes as well
My thoughts
Aren’t secret
She listens in
And adapts to my mood
I hate her
I love her
I hate her
I love her
I want her gone
But I don’t know how I’ll live
Without her
Is she apart of me?
Like an arm or a leg?
Or is she like a baby?
Forever growing inside of me?
Is this a test?
Of indurance?
Or is it torture?
Mixed emotions…
Swirling in my heart.
Am I her mother
Her daughter?
Her sister?
Her love?
Her soul mate?
Her teacher?
Her student?
Her island?
Or am I her way into this world?
Sometimes…
She helps me,
Saves me.
She is my defensive stance,
And my offencive attack.
Confusion…
I can’t but I can.
I won’t but I will.
I don’t but I do.
Confusion…
*Madelyn
She calls to me
She’s everywhere
I sit in the corner,
In the dark.
My head in my hands,
Praying it would all just stop.
*Madelyn
She calls to me
Shut up! SHUT UP!
I WANT MY OWN MIND!
I WANT TO BE NORMAL!
I don’t want to hear voices.
*Madelyn
She calls to me
*I’m your best friend
Yes, you are.
But your also
My worst enemy
Confusion…
Turns into insanity
I give up
She’s real
I’m not strong
Take my body,
Take my mind.
Just grant me one
Small mercy:
Leave my soul,
Please.
*Madelyn
She calls to me
I shriek in surprise
She’s right near my ear.
*I’m not the worst thing out there...
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Bob K
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1 posted 10-18-2010 01:33 AM       View Profile for Bob K   Email Bob K   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bob K



Dear Madelyn,

           This is an interesting draft.  If you want to leave it here, it could work well for you.  Are you interested in taking it further by, for example, turning it into a dialogue poem.  These sorts of things were more frequent in the middle ages, but they're still an interesting possibility — should you feel drawn to the possibility — of giving a voice in your poem for both the speaker and the Other, the voice which gets the speaker so rattled.  It'd give you a chance to fill out both sides of the dialogue instead of simply giving voice to the frightened Speaker.

     It's possible to use the second voice either as part of the same poem or as a second poem written in response.

     It's also one of the ways that you can use a poem to help explore some of the things that you're busy feeling your way through at the time, and not getting bullied about by some of those more powerful cross currents that we can run across from time to time by listening to them, giving them a voice and allowing other parts of ourselves, as you so coirrectly point out, to talk back to them.

     Great and energetic piece.

     What's you're thinking about the center-justifying of the lines, by the way?  I've tried writing that way from time to time, but it always seems to make my stuff more difficult on the eyes, and easier to put down for my readers.  Are you experimenting with it, do you find it useful or what?  I've gotten boring in my old age, and left justified my stuff, simply because it feels more accessable.  I've gone back and forth on capitalizing the first word in my lines — I don't do it any more, but I did for years.  Now I tend to write out the word "and" instead of using the ampersand ("&") which I used to love.

     Curiously, Bob Kaven  
Amberzlynnc
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2 posted 11-02-2010 03:43 AM       View Profile for Amberzlynnc   Email Amberzlynnc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Amberzlynnc's Home Page   View IP for Amberzlynnc

Wow.. I greatly enjoyed this! You have talent.
s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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3 posted 11-02-2010 04:19 PM       View Profile for s1nfully_1nn0c3nt   Email s1nfully_1nn0c3nt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit s1nfully_1nn0c3nt's Home Page   View IP for s1nfully_1nn0c3nt

I COULD NOT STOP READING THIS. I had to read to the end. Enjoyed. Ah, I hope you write another piece to respond to this - to justify the voice, what it might be.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

madelyn
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4 posted 11-03-2010 02:15 AM       View Profile for madelyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for madelyn

Please see The Girl (sequel to The Voice) if you enjoyed this.

And now I lay me down to sleep, I pray the lord my soul to keep. And if I die before I wake, I pray the lord my soul to take.

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