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sammy9698
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since 2010-10-16
Posts 5


0 posted 2010-10-16 04:26 PM


When i say those three words,
Its because they are more then words,
They are bigger then you and me.

When i sat those three words,
Its not just to make conversation,
Its to express forever.

When i say those three words,
Its not out of habbit,
Its to remind you of the life you changed.

When i say I LOVE YOU,
Its to show you that you that you are the best thing to ever happen to me.
For those who have all found love

© Copyright 2010 Samantha - All Rights Reserved
XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
1 posted 2011-01-05 07:58 PM


Aww... This is sweet and sincere and absolutely adorable. And since you encourage critiques, I know for myself that spelling errors detract from my objectivity when reading a poem. You wrote "then" twice when it should have been "than", and wrote "sat" once instead of "say". But all in all this was a beautiful first post. Thank you for sharing.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

*tori_rose*
Junior Member
since 2010-10-12
Posts 44
Weber City, VA
2 posted 2011-01-14 11:36 PM


i love it so adorable but i second the spelling errors, next time before posting read over it.  but over all it was great

~*tori*~

Starcitta
Junior Member
since 2011-01-21
Posts 18
WY, USA
3 posted 2011-01-23 11:03 PM


that is sumtin that i wuld encourage to be on a card for valentines day...its sweet nd shows ur other half your deeper feelings...i love it

Amor Y Lagrimas

HopelessRomantic101
Junior Member
since 2011-02-09
Posts 10
Georgia, United States of America
4 posted 2011-02-15 12:54 PM


It's sweet and touching, I'll give you that.  As previously stated, spelling counts.  So does capitalization.  
Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
5 posted 2011-02-15 08:50 PM


Sammy,

Welcome to Passions! Please, Check your
email for a Very Special Welcome!

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062
In Love <3
6 posted 2011-02-20 01:23 AM


I love this. I feel we often forget why we say those 3 words. In the words of Snow Patrol "those three words are said too much, but not enough." Welcome to Pip!

-Kate

On the black coated walls, they wrote my doom.

madelyn
Member
since 2009-09-03
Posts 172
Purgatory
7 posted 2011-03-07 05:21 AM


Beautiful poem.

I loved this!

Amazing!

M

"If I am an angel paint me with black wings"-Anne Rice

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