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Nearing Death

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animecrazy71
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since 10-01-2010
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Pakistan


0 posted 10-05-2010 09:12 AM       View Profile for animecrazy71   Email animecrazy71   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit animecrazy71's Home Page   View IP for animecrazy71


Is this The Feeling,
The feeling of dying,


Breathing heavily with my chest out,
My eyes losing light, nearing a blackout,


Not Feeling any pat, slap, or punch,
As I slowly lose my sense of touch,


My ears rejecting every air wave,
As, for air, I vehemently crave,


The feeling of life, slipping away, into an abyss,
Then Suddenly, bursts light, bringing bliss,


Coming slowly to senses, I hear and see,
My friends striving to revive me,


Saved by friends, and The Higher Power,
I feel the luckiest man of the hour,


Now I carry with me, forever, The Feeling,
The feeling of almost Dying,
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XxForever.BrokenxX
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1 posted 10-05-2010 05:56 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Wow nice write!
I really like your choice of words, they bring a more mature sound to your poem. =]
Nice job.

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animecrazy71
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Thank You! i really appreciate it.....
 
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