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HersheyKiss
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since 06-02-2008
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0 posted 08-18-2010 11:24 AM       View Profile for HersheyKiss   Email HersheyKiss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for HersheyKiss

hey back for awhile. Not one of my best. Let me know what you think.

Sinner's Lullaby:

Hush little baby
You think you deserve
To voice your opinions?
You think you matter?

Well you don't
Because in this place
I play God and I say
You don't matter

You have no opinions
You have no good dreams
And I will rule your life
Until you turn 18

You will do as I say
If you say no you will pay
And I will say when
All of this ends

Because I am your father
Because you do as I say
Or else this might
Be your last day
© Copyright 2010 Danielle - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-18-2010 03:37 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

  NOT laughing at you... but being a father and having raised a son, and having had some similar conversations with him as to what was and was not allowed..
I see times have not changed at all, which is to me at least amusing..

It is tough..for you and for a parent. Parents tend to worry a lot...about things you may not even thnk of, and often they are motivated to take a stern approach out fo their own fear that something happen to you....  it isn't easy to find compromise or to even feel like you are heard I'm sure.

I would say..the motive for most such "rules" are well intended and fueled by the care and love the parent has...


your poem... is a nice read.. and you capture well as I remember some of the feelings expressed to me by my son as well as some of the things I may have said to him, so I enjoyed!

good luck... and don't be too hard on your folks... they are human too.
XGarapanX
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since 06-19-2008
Posts 1416
Rekjavik Iceland


2 posted 01-02-2011 10:07 AM       View Profile for XGarapanX   Email XGarapanX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit XGarapanX's Home Page   View IP for XGarapanX

Wow. I'm sad if this is true and impressed if you simply felt your way through this. It portrays and insensitive and closed mind from an archaic and very bent family tradition. I always thought a father should be especially sensitive, understanding, nurturing and supportive of his children... but then again, the sky on my planet is neon green.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

DrinaLove
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since 12-23-2010
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3 posted 01-04-2011 05:10 AM       View Profile for DrinaLove   Email DrinaLove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DrinaLove

Poetry is therapeudic....I saw my dad as commander a lot....takes me back
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