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HersheyKiss
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since 2008-06-02
Posts 137
New Jersey

0 posted 2010-08-18 11:24 AM


hey back for awhile. Not one of my best. Let me know what you think.

Sinner's Lullaby:

Hush little baby
You think you deserve
To voice your opinions?
You think you matter?

Well you don't
Because in this place
I play God and I say
You don't matter

You have no opinions
You have no good dreams
And I will rule your life
Until you turn 18

You will do as I say
If you say no you will pay
And I will say when
All of this ends

Because I am your father
Because you do as I say
Or else this might
Be your last day

© Copyright 2010 Danielle - All Rights Reserved
Cpat Hair
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Member Patricius
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

1 posted 2010-08-18 03:37 PM


  NOT laughing at you... but being a father and having raised a son, and having had some similar conversations with him as to what was and was not allowed..
I see times have not changed at all, which is to me at least amusing..

It is tough..for you and for a parent. Parents tend to worry a lot...about things you may not even thnk of, and often they are motivated to take a stern approach out fo their own fear that something happen to you....  it isn't easy to find compromise or to even feel like you are heard I'm sure.

I would say..the motive for most such "rules" are well intended and fueled by the care and love the parent has...


your poem... is a nice read.. and you capture well as I remember some of the feelings expressed to me by my son as well as some of the things I may have said to him, so I enjoyed!

good luck... and don't be too hard on your folks... they are human too.

XGarapanX
Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
2 posted 2011-01-02 10:07 AM


Wow. I'm sad if this is true and impressed if you simply felt your way through this. It portrays and insensitive and closed mind from an archaic and very bent family tradition. I always thought a father should be especially sensitive, understanding, nurturing and supportive of his children... but then again, the sky on my planet is neon green.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

DrinaLove
Junior Member
since 2010-12-23
Posts 30
California
3 posted 2011-01-04 05:10 AM


Poetry is therapeudic....I saw my dad as commander a lot....takes me back
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