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Stained Glass

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mozart4321
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0 posted 06-29-2010 02:58 PM       View Profile for mozart4321   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mozart4321

Like stained glass,
my life shattered into
different colors.
separated areas of
focus.
shapes divided by
uneven lines.
each piece its
own and unique.
but together,
a whole.


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1 posted 06-30-2010 04:48 PM       View Profile for UNTAMEDelegance   Email UNTAMEDelegance   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for UNTAMEDelegance

I love it. Just as in your last poem that I saw, the imagery is stunning. And if I might be so bold to say that I thought the imagery was better in this one. Even though it is a simple, short poem, the effect is elegant and dramatic. The one thing I might work on is grammer unless it was intentionally done the way it was. If it was intentional then I completely understand.
Beautiful poem.

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mozart4321
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2 posted 07-01-2010 02:28 PM       View Profile for mozart4321   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mozart4321

thank you!!  what do you suggest for grammar?
*tori_rose*
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3 posted 10-14-2010 06:59 PM       View Profile for *tori_rose*   Email *tori_rose*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *tori_rose*

i love it simple and short yet says so much.

~*tori*~

 
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