Hi, I really like this piece. I can see being embraced, and overwhelmed by the picture you’ve created. I kind of think that you could make it better without using the word “light” so much. I’m not sure how’d you even get around using it, but I think in describing, you referred back to light to much. It’s a great descriptor word (I mean heck, we all know light), but is there a way to get past using it as a hinge piece? I don’t know. Maybe sitting out in the sun with your eyes closed and just using what pops into your mind at the moment.
Anyway, good job. I enjoyed reading your piece.