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Stitches
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0 posted 05-17-2010 05:49 PM       View Profile for Stitches   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Stitches


There's been a hole in your heart
From where you first began;
But I caught the bulletin,
And this is how it ran:

'I'm bleeding so help me,
I'm bruised green and blue,
And the only person who can help me-
Is little old you.'

I applied for the place,
I tried ever so hard.
But I could never quite find,
The missing shard.

I decided you hid it,
Along with the glue.
So the only person really-
Who can help is you.

'I feel like an animal, and I don't think that I get it. But one day I'll see you around.'

© Copyright 2010 Gabrielle Cohen - All Rights Reserved
Leanne <3
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1 posted 05-17-2010 07:40 PM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

I got a little confused at first but when i read it again i loved it.
I've been looking for that missing shard for a long time.
-Lee
whisperingwalt
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2 posted 05-20-2010 09:56 AM       View Profile for whisperingwalt   Email whisperingwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for whisperingwalt

very well done...depth with emotion...ww
Octave
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3 posted 05-23-2010 05:05 AM       View Profile for Octave   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Octave

This was nicely done. The whole 'hole in my heart' thing can be cliche and overdone but you pulled this off nicely and made it something different. Good write!
Stitches
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4 posted 05-23-2010 06:28 AM       View Profile for Stitches   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Stitches

Thanks

'I feel like an animal, and I don't think that I get it. But one day I'll see you around.'

freeand2sexy
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5 posted 06-04-2010 10:14 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Original and Amazingly AWEsome!!!

I loved it!

"When I die, I want to go peacefully like my Grandfather did, in his sleep -- not screaming, like the passengers in his car"  
- Unknown

toriber
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6 posted 06-11-2010 01:09 PM       View Profile for toriber   Email toriber   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for toriber

it was great, veery deep

*love- cant live with it cant live without it*

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