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Palms To Chest

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Octave
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0 posted 05-16-2010 03:02 PM       View Profile for Octave   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Octave

I don't like this. There are parts that could have been something, but it just didn't get there. It's been so long and i just really needed to write something and this came out.


Palms To Chest

Here we are, this is us
Sailed here on chewed up trust
Everything weve been made to be
Splattered out for all to see

Pinkies linked, skin bleeds grey
Weve been stretched too far away
Muscles straining, deaf to sound
So far up and we cant look down

Search ourselves to find the cause
Pick apart and ignore the flaws
Blame ourselves, blame each other
Kiss the sister, shoot the brother

Weaving sly between the lies
Both too proud to attempt to try
Palms to chest and knee to groin
Were two sides of the same damned coin

Here we are, this is us
Sailed here on chewed up trust
Everything weve been made to be
In the end, its you and me.
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Leanne <3
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1 posted 05-17-2010 07:41 PM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

You said it didn't quite get there, but i think this was perfect!
great write, i always enjoy reading your poems!
-Lee
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2 posted 05-18-2010 03:00 PM       View Profile for nehematala   Email nehematala   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nehematala

this is a great poem.
Some of the best are ones that "just come out"

~Michelle
Octave
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3 posted 05-22-2010 07:46 PM       View Profile for Octave   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Octave

Thank you both! (:
 
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