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Just.Another.Falling.Star
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0 posted 05-13-2010 06:00 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

Wow, I haven't posted in a really long time, but this is just how I've been feeling lately, except there is no one to protect me. But whatever, I'm excited though, I accomplished a sonnet!


Turn it up, turn it up,
just turn it up and let me drown
                     in the music.
I need you to distract me,
to take me under your wing
                     and keep me safe.
The silence is killing me,
please just save me
                     from myself.
I want to run away and hide,
hide from who I am mostly...
                     but who I'm becoming.
I'm falling to pieces
right before your very eyes.


julianna

"Many of the most significant moments in our lives come not because it all went right, but because it all fell apart." - Rob Bell
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whisperingwalt
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since 04-29-2010
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Coquitlam, BC, Canada


1 posted 05-13-2010 08:20 PM       View Profile for whisperingwalt   Email whisperingwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for whisperingwalt

"I want to run away and hide,
hide from who I am mostly...
                     but who I'm becoming.
I'm falling to pieces
right before your very eyes"

These lines come across very raw and heartfelt. Your ability to convey your present state when you wrote this is excellent. Always remember that sometimes we fall to pieces so that we heal even stronger as we journey through this thing called life. well done. ww

[This message has been edited by whisperingwalt (05-15-2010 12:38 AM).]

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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2 posted 05-13-2010 10:45 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

thank you very much whisperingwalt, it means a lot to me when someone tells me the honest truth of what they think of my poems. not just "great job!", if you know what i mean.
so thank you

julianna

"Many of the most significant moments in our lives come not because it all went right, but because it all fell apart." - Rob Bell

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