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broken_smile1469
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0 posted 05-05-2010 09:25 PM       View Profile for broken_smile1469   Email broken_smile1469   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for broken_smile1469

the darkness, it won't go away.
i want to get out, and escape
this horrendous world in which i live
the smile i keep having to fake.

I'm not like the rest.
I don't see the world the same.
I see the beauty, i want it.
everyones to blame.

I try to be beautiful.
cliche as opposed to unique.
still my mind floats away
and all anyone does is critique

the way i look.
the way i dress.
will it ever be enough?
i'm sick this nonsense.

I'll just lay here.
get lost within my mind.
where everything's perfect.
my own world, divine.
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WaterFairy103
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1 posted 05-09-2010 03:02 AM       View Profile for WaterFairy103   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WaterFairy103

I like this!  It's kind of edgy, and it changes toward the end, so you kind of get a "screw you guys!" feel.  Good job.

Don't take life so seriously.  It's not permanent.

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2 posted 05-09-2010 04:26 PM       View Profile for whisperingwalt   Email whisperingwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for whisperingwalt

Nice rhymes....good self reflection...It is who are that counts. keep on writing, it does wonders for the soul.
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thanks!
 
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