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RevengeIsMine
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Down this hole that Alice fell,
Where no creature could ever dwell,
She discovered a world that was all her own,
Never realizing that she was alone.

In this place, her head went wild.
She looked all around and then she smiled
For there were mirrors every which way,
And she noticed that she just could not look away.

Some made her look funny, some made her look tall.
Some made her look not very attractive at all.
But one single mirror made her look thin.
As she starred she felt a peace come from within.

“This” she thought, “is what I want to be.
Not the chubby child I normally see.”
Then in the mirror a smile appeared,
The cat then told her what she had feared.

In order to look like the girl that she saw,
She would have to focus on every flaw.
She would have to begin by not eating food,
Then exercise even when not in the mood.

She would have to listen to all that he said,
And follow the path to which she is led.
Alice agreed without giving much thought
She agreed to listen and do what she was taught.

The path she was led to was dark and was scary.
And she never once thought that she should be wary
All because she was young and naïve
The struggles she’d face she could not conceive.

But the cat, he knew what she would do.
She would listen to him and eat nothing too.
Then she would grow thin, and weak at that.
She would never question this lovable cat.

Although she was angry when he did persist,
That the tea party would just have to be missed.
She followed blindly what one person said
And never turned back to go home instead.

Now she is dead, starved in a hole,
All because the cat took over control.
She could have turned back before it was too late,
But she listened blindly and this was her fate
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Falling rain
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1 posted 05-05-2010 08:08 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Moral of story: Never trust talking cats. Lol.

Miss talking to ya girl :/ Hope things are well.

-Zach
nehematala
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2 posted 05-05-2010 05:02 PM       View Profile for nehematala   Email nehematala   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nehematala

This is a really good poem, sad, but all to true.
littlemonster
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3 posted 05-06-2010 04:02 AM       View Profile for littlemonster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit littlemonster's Home Page   View IP for littlemonster

An interesting, thought provoking poem.

If only so many wouldn't listen to the cat.
XxForever.BrokenxX
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4 posted 05-06-2010 07:20 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Brilliant write Jess.  
Miss you.  


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broken_smile1469
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5 posted 05-08-2010 12:43 AM       View Profile for broken_smile1469   Email broken_smile1469   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for broken_smile1469

i love this poem!
Rosie_Orange
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since 04-20-2009
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6 posted 05-08-2010 03:30 PM       View Profile for Rosie_Orange   Email Rosie_Orange   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rosie_Orange

shows all our fears, but through something that reminds us of childhood.
incredible.
Leanne <3
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N.S.W, Australia


7 posted 05-09-2010 01:52 AM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

amazing interpretation, was hanging off every word
-Lee
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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8 posted 05-21-2010 10:18 AM       View Profile for RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed

one word: Love. I miss you sorry I haven't been around in a while. I've been so consumed by life it's nice to sit and write and read again.
PS. I love this!

-Kate

"What are you!?"
"I'm complicated."

Octave
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9 posted 05-23-2010 05:02 AM       View Profile for Octave   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Octave

Ah, that damn cat.

Good write. Interesting.
Earl Robertson
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10 posted 05-24-2010 12:34 AM       View Profile for Earl Robertson   Email Earl Robertson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Earl Robertson

I always new there was something wrong with that Crazy Cheshere!

This was absolutly astondingly amazing!!

Discipline is remembering what you want.
-David Cambell

whisperingwalt
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11 posted 05-24-2010 02:09 AM       View Profile for whisperingwalt   Email whisperingwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for whisperingwalt

Enjoyed the read...you shared an important bit of wisdom in a unique and excellent way..well done.ww
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12 posted 05-24-2010 11:23 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Brilliant!  We have to listen to ourselves first, before all others.
 
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