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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 04-23-2010 05:27 AM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for hunnie_girl


Looking in the mirror,
such an expressionless face,
changing through the years,
shaped by every place.

impossible to find
whats inside of me
where did she go?
that girl I used to be

I miss that innocence
and how easy it had been
growing up is hard
people can be so mean

the curfew that I hated
is a sign that someone cared
now there's no one there
to hold me when i'm scared

Looking in the mirror
all I see is someones name
just another person
what have I became?


Love is like a boat with a hole in the bottom. you always end up sinking

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1 posted 04-23-2010 08:58 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Your poems are always soo well written out. I'm soo jealous!! lol. Like I can't even write as well as you. Great job. And this deserves a favorite.

okay... so I love strangers with candy :)

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2 posted 06-17-2010 11:58 AM       View Profile for toriber   Email toriber   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for toriber

i love your writes. im new to this site but iv read alot of your writes and they rock!!

id rather be extordinary together rather than ordinary a part

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3 posted 06-18-2010 01:34 AM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

thats so nice to hear, as I have not been on here much at all. Thank you both!
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4 posted 06-21-2010 11:56 PM       View Profile for VelvetVampress   Email VelvetVampress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for VelvetVampress

i love this poem it is well written

~Velvet Vampress~

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5 posted 06-22-2010 01:34 PM       View Profile for AlexandriaDixon   Email AlexandriaDixon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AlexandriaDixon

I thought this was a great poem. It is easily related to. The only thing I would suggest saying is that in the third stanza I would switch lines 1 and 2 and make them 3 and 4. (if that made any sense) Other than that it flowed beautifully.
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6 posted 07-17-2010 03:36 PM       View Profile for arthur   Email arthur   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for arthur

nice to see some one interested in the sound of the poem as well as the sense of it.last line eeds a polish to keep the sound signature(unless it is deleberate) arthur
 
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