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a drunken story

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Britt_Brat
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Knoxville, TN


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i trust to much. i love to much. i have given you everything i have to offer and its still not enough apparently. not only you shattered my heart that night but my closes and nearly only friend to. the words you spoke to her cut me like splinters. i trust to much. i love to much. i am to stupid because i forgave you without a thought against it. you told me you were drunk that it was drunk words spoken drunken action committed. so i let it go without a thought. even though i believe drunk words are sober thoughts. now my life is an endless misery because of those drunken words.

Lost & wondering till I'm found

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wolfy09
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1 posted 04-16-2010 01:48 AM       View Profile for wolfy09   Email wolfy09   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wolfy09

i really like your poems this is the second peace by you that ive read. im wondering if youve ever tried to space the lines in your poetry differently. i personally like to organize my poems it makes them easier to read. other than that you have strong words and strong poems. keep writing. i look forward to read more of your work.
N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet
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So its quite common a broken heart brings the poetic side of things. You've captured this quite bitterly and beautifully.
 
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