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Apathetic, Just Pathetic, Crushed

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My lungs collapse,
my heart caves in.
To save myself from agony,
I wrap myself in apathy.
The dreaded pain,
the endless rain
of a game that I can't win.

My eyes don't work,
I'm bleeding bricks.
To keep myself from feeling sad,
No emotion; good or bad,
Can penetrate,
the padlock gate.
Pain so bad it's just pathetic.

My trembling hands,
the pain-fueled rush.
To keep myself from any feeling
I hide the pain until I'm kneeling
from the pressure,
pains' still fresher.
Just found out and now I'm crushed.

Nothing is more painful that realizing he meant everything to you, but you meant nothing to him. (Unknown)

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1 posted 03-26-2010 09:17 PM       View Profile for UNTAMEDelegance   Email UNTAMEDelegance   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for UNTAMEDelegance

Oops, sorry I posted that twice. Didn't mean to.
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2 posted 03-27-2010 01:13 PM       View Profile for LoveAbounds   Email LoveAbounds   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveAbounds

I like the rhythmical flow of the poem. It is not one I've thought to use before.
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3 posted 03-27-2010 01:19 PM       View Profile for UNTAMEDelegance   Email UNTAMEDelegance   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for UNTAMEDelegance

I've never used this one before either. Thank you.
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freeand2sexy
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Great write!!! Sad but great! I really enjoyed reading this!

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

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