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Taylor See
Member

since 2008-10-07

Posts 55
North Carolina, US

0 posted 2010-03-25 10:51 AM

Splash all the colors!
Bright gold and blue!
And paint them on the canvas sky.
Just sling the paint to make the birds
That gently glide into the sun.

Brush soft the scene with earth-browned hands
To raise the groaning trees and set
The green leaves swaying with the tips
Of your lime-soaked fingers, bright with life.

Oh kiss the grass with your strawberry lips
And breathe the flowers from the soil.
Call songs to the birds and make them sing
In bursts of cheerful yellow sound.

Take your brush and tickle the river
To make it laugh until it's blue,
And flick your hair to slick the air
With blotches of orange and butterfly gold.

Now take a moment, let it dry
And gaze upon the world you've made
Born into being by brush's breath
And all from your heart and a few bright colors!

~Taylor

And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall
They forget that they can move themselves, in the greatest game of all

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

1 posted 2010-03-27 05:29 PM

Amazing write from such a talented poet!!!

I have a question! How long did it take you to write this? And do you revise and edit your poems or do they just come out great the first time?

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

2 posted 2010-03-28 09:24 PM

Such a Beautiful write!!
your imagery was perfect

Taylor See
Member

since 2008-10-07

Posts 55
North Carolina, US

3 posted 2010-03-29 10:18 AM

Thanks!

Hey Free!
I write poems straight out. This one took I think 20 minutes. I don't usually do a lot of revision but it depends on the poem. Its difficult for me to just write a poem on demand, but if I get inspired by something or try to write about a feeling I have then it usually comes straight out. Thanks for the interest! =)

And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall
They forget that they can move themselves, in the greatest game of all

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

4 posted 2010-03-29 11:20 AM

Wow, I could never do that. I use to write my poems in 10 to 30 min, and everybody thought they were so good, and then I actually learned more about poetry and realized my poems were horrible, haha.

Now it takes me, usually, weeks to finish a poem.

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

kjsd
Member

since 2010-01-07

Posts 74
sd usa

5 posted 2010-03-31 07:00 PM

nice poem

Bailey
Junior Member

since 2010-04-09

Posts 12
Georgia, US

6 posted 2010-04-09 01:12 PM

I love your your writing!
oh and Free im the same. i use to just write poems and thought they were great until I actually learned about structures now its not so easy

Bailey

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