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This is what happens when you don't comment on my other poems!

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LoveAbounds
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0 posted 03-19-2010 10:15 PM       View Profile for LoveAbounds   Email LoveAbounds   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveAbounds

I angry.
U no reed me.
make me mad.
i no give u grammer then.
too bad.
read my stuff
dis ain't no bluff,
ain't bad stuff.
i mad i mad i mad.
i had i had i had.
a sad sad tail of a place,
where the critics were making me mad.
no no no
i don't care
look at my stuff
i no look at u
cuz u no look at me
but i no look first
cuz i don't like it
i like beat
u like pictures
i no can do that you can
u better
but i rhyme and
i got beat
u know?
me no can read without no beat
yall don't even count the feet
read me please
please
cuz i mad mad mad
and i sad sad sad
u so bad bad bad
now i mad mad mad.
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freeand2sexy
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since 09-12-2008
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1 posted 03-20-2010 01:56 AM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Haha, well I hope this helps you get more comments!

I'll be sure to comment on one of yours, and maybe you could do me a favor and comment on one of mine.

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

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2 posted 03-20-2010 02:19 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

You have only commented on four posts and who knows if those were responses to your own.  You might want to try reading other people's poetry and oommenting on their work - and they, in turn, might comment on yours.  Beats being mad anyway.

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3 posted 03-20-2010 04:33 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

I'm sorry about my comment before. It was entirely rude of me. Just be aware that there are other people here. Everyone wants their poems read and commented on. So your not the only one.

I liked the write over all. But I don't see any form here, or rhyme for that matter. (I assumed you were all about that kind of stuff)
Over all good job.

-Zach  

Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters.

[This message has been edited by Falling rain (03-20-2010 08:14 PM).]

 
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