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freeand2sexy
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0 posted 03-19-2010 02:23 AM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy


Just a poetry exercise I decided to do.


I want a house with many rooms,
Some small and some huge,
With many doors and many walls
That change color
To fit my mood.

I want a house without locks,
In a neighborhood without the need
Of a neighborhood watch,
Without fences or gates
Just a front yard
With wide open space.

I want a house filled with fish
And guinea pigs that feed themselves,
With a dog doing tricks
And a cat chasing a mouse.

I want a house that is me,
With glistening lights
In every room,
With the simple beauty
Of cherry blossoms
Beginning to bloom.

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

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1 posted 03-20-2010 02:24 AM       View Profile for LoveAbounds   Email LoveAbounds   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveAbounds

This poem flows freely and is an adequate description of how you want a house and what kind of house you want. If you were discouraged by the apparent shallowness of my critique, don't be. I actually liked the poem. Unfortunately, I am not in a well enough state to applaud it to your satisfaction. No really; I'm having an issue right now.
freeand2sexy
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2 posted 03-20-2010 02:36 AM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

No worries, I don't get discouraged easily, anyways. Thanks for the comment.

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

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3 posted 03-21-2010 01:38 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

Christine, I enjoyed this poem very much, in fact it had inspired me to write one as well . thanks for the inspiration! writers block for months!
Krysti
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4 posted 03-21-2010 07:50 PM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

ahh in a perfect world..

Loved this poem, well written
-Lee
freeand2sexy
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5 posted 03-22-2010 10:43 AM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Thanks!!!

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

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