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spoiledsushi
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0 posted 02-25-2010 06:20 PM       View Profile for spoiledsushi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spoiledsushi

The fire in your eyes burns fiercely
I almost flinch at the sight of your pain
Leaving me breathless and so full of sorrow
This day will never end, where is tomorrow?
For to day will be gone and tomorrow is to come
Not for you, I'm afraid you'll be gone with the sun

Darkness begins to cover me, the stars no longer shine
It's all because you never said you would be mine

You left me to drown in my tears
Now I'll leave you to die with your fears

Leaving with all these scars full of memories
I'm battered and bruised, my heart in deep-freeze
Left cold and alone in this messed up world
I still remember your hair, soft and curled

Your eyes, filled with hope and sincerity
It's those features that make me feel guilty...
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XxForever.BrokenxX
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1 posted 02-26-2010 02:19 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

nice write, I like the feel of it. It's like these thought are still so fresh in your mind.

Welcome to PIP Cara. I hope to read more soon.  

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spoiledsushi
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Tejas


2 posted 02-26-2010 03:46 PM       View Profile for spoiledsushi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spoiledsushi

Thank you! Yeah, it's just something I wrote up really quickly. I'm not really proud of it but it's decent enough to post, I think.
BrittanyJ
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Come find me?


3 posted 03-02-2010 03:31 PM       View Profile for BrittanyJ   Email BrittanyJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BrittanyJ

"Your eyes, filled with hope and sincerity
It's those features that make me feel guilty..."

I thought it was good Some tweaking here and there wouldn't do any harm, but it's definitely worth posting.

Do you really love me? Or should i just let go now??

Leanne <3
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4 posted 03-03-2010 02:39 AM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

"You'll be gone with the sun" i love this line.
great write
-Lee
spoiledsushi
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5 posted 03-03-2010 06:05 PM       View Profile for spoiledsushi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spoiledsushi

Thanks everyone, I really appreciate your feedback.
 
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