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freeand2sexy
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0 posted 02-25-2010 05:27 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

I don't know how good this poem is, but I just wrote it, so I can't expect it to be good. Sorry if it's a bit long, just let me know what you think, even if you don't like it.


My nose sniffles
On top this freezing hill,
Whining,
While I wait for J. Williams,
Boyfriend No. 7,
But if he doesn't show,
My nose
Is sure to fall off
And die,
And decompose.

My fingers quiver
A little here and a little there,
Whispering,
While I wait for T. White,
Boyfriend No. 9,
But if he doesn't show,
My fingers
Are sure to break off
And die,
And decompose.

My hair sways
With the beating winds of this hill,
Whipping,
While I wait for L. Whitney,
Boyfriend No. 12,
But if he doesn't show,
My hair
Is sure to fall off
And dance away,
And decompose.

My feet tap…
While I wait…
Boyfriend No. 16,
But if he doesn't show…

And die,
And decompose.

My arms…
My lips…
My eyes water…

Boyfriend No.32…

But if he doesn't show…
But if he doesn't show…

My heart
Will fall frozen
And die,
And decompose.

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

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Leanne <3
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1 posted 02-26-2010 07:40 PM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

No i really enjoyed reading this, it wasnt too long either.  Was a sad storyline you told it well!
-Lee
freeand2sexy
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2 posted 02-27-2010 01:58 AM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Thanks!!!

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

unfinishedlife
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3 posted 03-07-2010 01:21 PM       View Profile for unfinishedlife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for unfinishedlife

Goodness!! I adore the way you write.
This is very nicely done.
freeand2sexy
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4 posted 03-10-2010 02:07 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Thank you!!!

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

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