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A Desolate Heart

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XxForever.BrokenxX
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0 posted 02-22-2010 08:52 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX



In a dusty room packed with memories,
sits a girl,
her eyes like coal.
There's a dull feeling of bitterness,
it leaves the room eternally silent.

There used to be smiles here,
I can see them in the cracks,
so faint yet memorable;
just a summer breeze.


Swirling cobwebs dance,
they're evidence of abandonment.
The girl watches them,
wishing she could be so free.
{~~*~~}
-I couldn't think of anything else to add.

EmilyTheStrange
{~~*~~}
I have a pet unicorn...his name is Flavius, as in Flavius Belby. Flavius does not like gumballs..

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1 posted 02-22-2010 10:45 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

No need to add on. Its perfect the way it is. I like it. Keep on Keepin' on.

-Zach

Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters.

XxForever.BrokenxX
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2 posted 02-23-2010 05:45 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Thanks.

{~~*~~}

EmilyTheStrange
{~~*~~}
I have a pet unicorn...his name is Flavius, as in Flavius Belby. Flavius does not like gumballs..

BrittanyJ
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Come find me?


3 posted 03-02-2010 03:37 PM       View Profile for BrittanyJ   Email BrittanyJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BrittanyJ

I really like this the way it is

Do you really love me? Or should i just let go now??

spoiledsushi
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4 posted 03-03-2010 06:48 PM       View Profile for spoiledsushi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spoiledsushi

I enjoyed it a lot. Your descriptions are very effective for me. I'm excited to read more of your poems.
XxForever.BrokenxX
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5 posted 03-03-2010 07:29 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Thank you.

EmilyTheStrange
{~~*~~}
I have a pet unicorn...his name is Flavius, as in Flavius Belby. Flavius does not like gumballs..

 
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