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Inspired by Alice in Wonderland and All Time Low's newest song. <3
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I'm spinning, twirling through the air
What a funny way to fall
Find a way and loose myself
Give into my senses; release it all

In a world where reality is upside down
I'll wake up but the dream isn't done
If nothing here is true
Then I know the battle hasn't been won

I'll play my cards and make it out
Of this world inside my head
© Copyright 2010 Zach Booker-Scott - All Rights Reserved
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i really liked the tone of this one, it was fun and lighthearted, even though the subject at hand wasn't so fun.  I dont think that makes sense but i really enjoyed this one
-Lee
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Zach,

I really like this.  The title is perfect too.  You have grown so much as a poet.

When I was a kid - my nickname was ...

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PS - I think it makes a lot of sense to any Alice in Wonderland fan.  Good writing.
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Lee,
I was kinda going for that light-hearted/serious tone. Alice in the story is lost in a unknown world. (I would be terrified to say the least) But she realizes that its all fun and games here (to a sense.) So I was trying to write like that. Thanks for reading.

Ali,
Thanks! I guess when you grow up writing. Your work grows too. Haha. I was trying really hard to write the story while writing the words I thought. Haha.
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Wonderful write! It's something I could read over and over again.

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

 
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