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HersheyKiss Member
since 2008-06-02
Posts 137New Jersey |
Hey. Back for a little. This is not one of my best but means a lot to me. Please let me know what you think. Untitled: He screamed and he cursed Yelled at me some more But he never had to suffer the pain Of walking through that door The door that leads to nowhere but death I walked through that door Scared and alone I watched pale faced women go looking as dead as the babes they left behind I sat in that waiting room As women much older than me began to cry Knowing soon that their babies would die The doctor called me in Made me wear one of them ugly gowns Nurses come and go Their faces stuck in a permanent frown They did their job Then left me to cry Trying to think of a lie A lie I'd tell my father When he'd ask here I'd been Knowing the whole time I had committed the worst sin |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
 I can't really think of anything to say except that this is not one of your worst. Poetry is written to express emotion, and you did that very well. I want you to know that if you want you can talk to me any time. I'm here for you. library. {~~*~~} EmilyTheStrange |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
I.. I really don't know what to say... your poem is very strong.. -Zach |
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