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RIP jacob. dedicated to jacob haneline, my best friend

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Clockwork_Orange
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0 posted 01-31-2010 11:18 AM       View Profile for Clockwork_Orange   Email Clockwork_Orange   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Clockwork_Orange's Home Page   View IP for Clockwork_Orange


today i woke up
with a pain in my chest
its been growing and growing
with every breath
because i know your not at home
or able to call
i know the pain is the reason
it pushed you to fall

but what is one more loaded gun
and another friend dead
if you can get away
without another word said
so you put the bullet in the clip
and you chambered a round
you put your finger on the trigger
and fell down with the sound

now im here today
wishing you were here
i know this car gets kinda crazy
when you forget how to steer
but if you would have said help
i would have walked for days
so that you could be here
and i could see your face


~ you cant run from yourself ~

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XxForever.BrokenxX
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1 posted 01-31-2010 02:24 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

I'm at a loss for words... This poem is very beautiful and I'm sorry about your friend. Death sucks.

Library.

{~~*~~}

EmilyTheStrange
{~~*~~}
I have a pet unicorn...his name is Flavius, as in Flavius Belby. Flavius does not like gumballs..

Falling rain
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2 posted 01-31-2010 03:29 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Dude in my opinion this is your BEST poem ever. Like really. Its my favorite from you yet. Beautifully sad. Sorry for your loss.

-Zach
BrittanyJ
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3 posted 03-02-2010 03:42 PM       View Profile for BrittanyJ   Email BrittanyJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BrittanyJ

I like this
Leanne <3
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4 posted 03-03-2010 02:36 AM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

i was hanging off every word. beautiful write, im so sorry to hear about your friend.
Take Care, Lee
spoiledsushi
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5 posted 03-03-2010 06:45 PM       View Profile for spoiledsushi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spoiledsushi

It almost made me cry. I think it's very beautiful. There's been so many deaths lately, it's kind of depressing. I'm glad there's poetry to help us through it, though.
RevengeIsMine
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6 posted 03-04-2010 12:40 AM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

This is amazing..

Rest In Peace Jacob...


"Hold The Heaven's High Tonight"
"There's Another Angel On The Way"
"Close You're Eyes, Just One Last Time"
"As They Open Up The Gates"

-- A Wise Young Man Once Wrote These Words... These Words Changed My Life...

xx
tiny_ME
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7 posted 03-06-2010 02:45 AM       View Profile for tiny_ME   Email tiny_ME   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for tiny_ME

...sorry bout your friend.
...great poem though. ;p
 
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