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Farewell Father

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Jeremy
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0 posted 01-29-2010 04:53 PM       View Profile for Jeremy   Email Jeremy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeremy

First Poem...not very good....

I had the perfect Father long ago

Whose warm smile could melt even snow

His arms rapped around me and held me tight

His eyes, wide open, kept pain out of sight

As time moved on, stress crept up between us

It formed a wall that severed our trust

My tears cried out, but the wall did not give

Through pain and suffering, I chose to live

Eventually, the wall crumbled before me

But stress had left its mark, he could not see

I hear him cry out, he has lost his way

He will not be found, I remember the pain
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Ravagence
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1 posted 01-31-2010 06:31 PM       View Profile for Ravagence   Email Ravagence   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ravagence

That was excellent. I enjoyed it a lot.
KatVern17
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2 posted 02-01-2010 09:08 AM       View Profile for KatVern17   Email KatVern17   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for KatVern17

That is really good.
Keep it up!
I look forward to reading more of your poems!

 
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