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HersheyKiss
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0 posted 01-18-2010 07:58 AM       View Profile for HersheyKiss   Email HersheyKiss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for HersheyKiss

Hey. Back for a little. Please let me know what you think.

Made to obey.
Donít shed a tear.
Kept my mouth shut.
Trembled with fear.

Learned more than once.
Must not resist.
Never accustomed
to the blow of the fist.

Why did Mommy marry
such a horrible man?
Robbing innocence from children,
Iíll never understand.

Memories still linger,
pain still survives.
Many will deal with it
for the rest of their lives.

Mom may not see,
but I look right through.
I can only hope you get
whatís coming to you
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UNTAMEDelegance
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1 posted 01-19-2010 01:49 PM       View Profile for UNTAMEDelegance   Email UNTAMEDelegance   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for UNTAMEDelegance

Holy Crap! I literally got shivers down my back when I read this poem. These are really powerful words.
                                   ~UNTAMEDelegance
m48
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since 12-02-2009
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2 posted 01-20-2010 02:04 PM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for m48

i felt the anger and shivers too.nicly written great feeling behind it.also it paints a story you can almost see while you read.
Leanne <3
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since 08-25-2007
Posts 217
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3 posted 01-20-2010 06:55 PM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

such a strong and emotion filled poem, i loved every word of it
great write
-Lee
precious pearls
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4 posted 01-27-2010 08:50 PM       View Profile for precious pearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for precious pearls

good poem...made me go through lots of feelings...made me sad to...and i understand... wat u mean about wanting him to feel the pain u feel...i understand bcuz i kno the feeling all too well
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5 posted 01-27-2010 09:29 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

You captured so many emotions with this poem, and did an excellent job of telling a really sad story.
Emi<3Naruto =]
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6 posted 01-29-2010 03:40 AM       View Profile for Emi<3Naruto =]   Email Emi<3Naruto =]   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Emi<3Naruto =]

wow. there are no words for this. i really felt the utter defeat throughout the poem and the anger in the last two lines. and wanting him to get whats coming to him, its like thats all you can hope for now. simply  amazing.
Jeremy
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7 posted 01-29-2010 04:45 PM       View Profile for Jeremy   Email Jeremy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeremy

Simply amazing....
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