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the lost poet
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0 posted 01-13-2010 01:03 AM       View Profile for the lost poet   Email the lost poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the lost poet

Thinking of what I did,
Looking back at all the times I bled.
Not once did you return the favor,
Not once did you murmer a thank you.

Wanting a second chance.
Not with you but to be among you,
To walk among you,
To feel and love again.

Waiting for my time again.
Another chance should be fair.
A stray bullet aiming for your heart,
Who knew i would be the one to tear.

Now im way up here, and your way down there.
I said I would die for you,
And I kept my promise.
Now im here thinking, wanting, waiting.
for a simple thank you.
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m48
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1 posted 01-13-2010 03:33 PM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for m48

kinda choppy couldnt really keep up with it.
had to re-read a few lines. didnt really get the idea.
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2 posted 01-17-2010 09:53 PM       View Profile for madelyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for madelyn

Really good poem.

I hope to see more of this standerd in the future
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3 posted 01-18-2010 03:41 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

I got it and think your message is strong.  Good poem - thank you.

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