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Raging Storm

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UNTAMEDelegance
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0 posted 01-10-2010 10:21 PM       View Profile for UNTAMEDelegance   Email UNTAMEDelegance   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for UNTAMEDelegance

A mournful wind, a haunting sound
as is blows past the barren ground.

The clouds above, a grey, silk gown
the rain comes and starts falling down.

The heaven's tears, so sad, they weep
for sunny days that sky can't keep.

The haunting sound the sharp winds make
The rain pours down, the heavens break.

The lightning strikes in static mirth
that blithely mocks the muddy earth.

It starts to flood a town nearby
A child awakes to waters high.

Her screams are drowning in the rain
A cry of melancholy pain.

A home destroyed, a city gone
before the tempest's rage is done.

The rain, now stopped; the onslaught dimmed
Leaving only howling wind.

[This message has been edited by UNTAMEDelegance (01-11-2010 12:42 AM).]

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1 posted 01-10-2010 10:38 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Beautifully rhymed and you set the scene perfectly.  You may wish to change a typo though to make it flow in the readers mind.
A home destroyes, a city gone
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Ooh, this is awesome. I really like it!

Wonderful rhyme! and Nice flow!

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

 
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