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m48
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0 posted 01-06-2010 02:47 PM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for m48


this was kinda random&intentional at the time.(comments are encouraged.)
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blackness surrounds this heart
so fond at one time to others
now seeks to be left alone
finding more and more reasons to frown
to let the tears flow down
the shadows dont scare whats left of me
change is comming
as the tv lights up the corner of my room
and the street light casts dancing clowns
on my window
no body sees whats really happening
change is comming
laughing now only once in a purple moon
my sky dark blue
true friends far and few
are the ones to run to
cracked streets greet me as the days go by
lived in this town  15 years gone
too damn long
change is comming
old reality about to shine through
taking on some one we all knew
thought she'd never return
never say never
change is near
prepare for strength
and a smirk to crack to moon
and make streets crumle benieth you
because change is here

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Ravagence
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1 posted 02-02-2010 06:59 PM       View Profile for Ravagence   Email Ravagence   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ravagence

It's good, just some parts it would be easier to read and look at if it was stanza'd but like many other poets; it's a matter of style.

Good read though.
 
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