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Just.Another.Falling.Star
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0 posted 01-03-2010 04:44 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

I most definately need to be writing more, this is one of my worst ever, and I kinda like the message, but its messily put together and doesn't make much sense, at least to me. So, tell me what you think, because...my opinion isn't that great, haha.

Oh...and the title sucks too, sorry.

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There are days in our lives
where we feel needed and loved.
Days where its all wonderful,
when we feel like we belong.

Sometimes its so amazing,
you forget about reality
and the struggles of people around you.
You forget the real you.

Its like we've been erased,
and we're searching for who we are.
We walk this world carelessly,
not caring about the ones that matter.

We need to see those hurting,
they need someone with open arms too.
Its not just about us,
its about the love for others first.

We need to step out of our big houses
with our new cars and latest gadgets.
We need to recognize the ones in pain,
so that maybe you'll find yourself again.

julianna

everyone's normal [until you get to know them]

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1 posted 01-03-2010 06:38 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Pfft! I really liked this one. Love the message. And your wording wasn't that bad actually. Stunning as always.

-Zach
Just.Another.Falling.Star
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oh, okay. well thank you! i'm glad you liked it.

julianna

everyone's normal [until you get to know them]

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