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m48
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0 posted 12-27-2009 02:10 PM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for m48


tick tock goes the clock on my stand
an hour to get ready
so excited is this really happening
finally a chance to go out
see a movie
does this shirt look ok
how about these jeans
oh what a day
working and waitig
for the time to arrive
popcorn with extra butter sounds nice
milk duds too
you like them just like i do
30 minutes left
butterflies in my chest
a tornado in my stomach
make sure my hair looks good
perfect no so much
a little bit of make up
just enough
17 minutes and counting
the time grows near
my legs are weak and im driving
oh dear
finally i can warm up the car
i grab my coat
7 minutes now
the radio playing our song
as i back out
this out fit is cute no doubt
i pull up to ur drive way
you walk to the car
the song is just ending
as you get in
we are on our way
to our ....
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1 posted 12-28-2009 11:33 AM       View Profile for Jaki H   Email Jaki H   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jaki H

i like it! the rhyme scheme is a bit confusing, but i really like the topic and how everyone can relate to it <3
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2 posted 12-28-2009 04:22 PM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for m48

thank you very much i appriciate the comments
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3 posted 12-29-2009 07:16 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

I didn't realize there was a rhyming scheme here. Oops. Hehe. But I really liked the topic. Very sweet and innocent.

-zach
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4 posted 01-01-2010 01:34 PM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for m48

thank you for ur feed back and i like to write what i feel even if it dosent quite fit lol.
 
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