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My Freedom is in Your Hands

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Just.Another.Falling.Star
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0 posted 12-19-2009 05:45 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

This is a "work-in-progress/something-that-just-popped-into-my-dead/writer's-block-poem". So its not my greatest.
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Click. Click.
I hear the camera flash.
Click. Click.
I know you're twisted mind.

Click, click, click.
Please stop doing this.
Click.
I want to run away.

I'm followed every day,
by the constant clicking sound.
I live my life in fear,
because of those pictures.

I know you need a friend,
I know you need to be loved.
Please don't do this to me...
I can help you stop this obsession.

julianna

everyone's normal [until you get to know them]

© Copyright 2009 Julianna - All Rights Reserved
Mysteria
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1 posted 12-19-2009 08:22 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Well I sure thought it was good, and the message sent is terrific!  I saw a t.v. special on kids falling into this type of "occupation" which will only lead to disaster later in life.  Look at Miss America!  

Well done!
Just.Another.Falling.Star
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thank you very much Mysteria! i'm glad you liked it.

julianna

everyone's normal [until you get to know them]

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3 posted 12-20-2009 10:31 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Wow Julianna! i really love this one..for its errie stalker-ish mood. xD
Just.Another.Falling.Star
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4 posted 12-20-2009 01:03 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

haha, oh zach. you would love it because of that. but thank you

julianna

everyone's normal [until you get to know them]

ThatOneGuy
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5 posted 12-26-2009 02:03 AM       View Profile for ThatOneGuy   Email ThatOneGuy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThatOneGuy

i haven't read one like this before. (and not sure if i've seen any of your work)but i like it alot good job!
Jaki H
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6 posted 12-28-2009 11:34 AM       View Profile for Jaki H   Email Jaki H   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jaki H

wow its kind of creepy in a way! i love it!
Just.Another.Falling.Star
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thank you ThatOneGuy & Jaki H!

julianna

everyone's normal [until you get to know them]

duckboy
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8 posted 01-02-2010 03:41 AM       View Profile for duckboy   Email duckboy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for duckboy

I didn't really get the stalkerish idea that most point out, almost seemed like the high school dilemma of the girl being pressed for photos of herself. I enjoyed it .
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