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complicated addiction.....
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complicated addiction..... |
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m48 Member
since 2009-12-02
Posts 108 |
(its not perfect, but i like it.enjoy and coment please!) like warm wine trickling down my spine your words enter my heart like silece on a battle field after the guns and screaming have stopped this is the voice i have questions paint a picture of intrest in my sleepless head like those three words, will they ever be said? am i rushing things, or going too fast? smile in the day time lay sleepless at night the bottle is calling just a sip no one will know. this is my fight longing for your company my past begins to creep up on me should i try it? comfort in pain, the tears are only alittle red. its 2am, would he mind a phone call? too many thoughts still. like the snow falling on the ground the silence echos the tv is on,muted by screaming thoughts that have kept me up the bottle begins to call again stay away,its poison. more questions, will i ever be or am i already his world? does he know how strong he is? how strong a man he must be to deal with me? that damn bottle wont stop calling. stong enough to stay away, weak at the knees. the battle isnt done im sleepy now i lay my head on my pillow. i begin to see my eyelids as they close finally sleep at last i can dream |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ah, but does the person really dream? A dull mind soaked in alcohol only leads to a hangover I would bet, and nightmares.  Nicely done. |
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MadMarcus Junior Member
since 2009-11-25
Posts 25Sweden, Solna |
This poem was like drinking a cold coca-cola on a hot summer day (One of my 5 greatest pleasure in life)! Can only say one thing and that is that this was wonderfull... <3 |
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m48 Member
since 2009-12-02
Posts 108 |
much thanks to the comments! i also like the diffrent takes on my poem. |
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